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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The masterplan represents the improvements made in the
village
 of Ryemouth
after
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 1995 to today.
Overall
, in the north of Ryemouth, it can be seen that over the years the housing community has increased in number and the farmland and forest
park
 have merged to form a golf course and tennis ground. In the southern lands, the shops have been converted to
restauraunts
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restaurants
 and
fish
market
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markets
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 to apartments. The cafe and the hotel have remained unchanged. In 1995, the
north western
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northwestern
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side
 of the
village
 consisted of residential units
whereas
 the
the
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north eastern
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northeastern
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side
 is
madeup
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made up
 of
the
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farmland and the forest
park
. the south of the
village
 is completely
sea facing
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 and the
south western
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southwestern
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 part of the rural area has shops and
fish
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a fish
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 market across the road. A
sea facing
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 cafe and hotel opposite
to
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each other are placed
on
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in
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 the
south eastern
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southeastern
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 part of the
village
. The fishing port is accessible by the beach. Today, Reymouth
village
 has developed dramatically. Starting off with the
north east
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northeast
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side
 of Reymouth, more
number of
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villas have been constructed and the road has been extended. The farmland and the forest
park
 have been transformed into a golf and tennis arena. The shops towards the
south west
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southwest
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side
 have been converted
to
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into
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restraunts
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restaurants
 and the
fish
 market
to
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into
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ocean facing
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ocean-facing
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 apartments. The
fish
 port has been removed and the cafe has remained the same,
however
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,however
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 a small car
park
 has been introduced to the hotel.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, park, fish, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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