The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the
price
of
copper
, nickel and
zinc
changed each month in 2014. As can
been
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from the graph, the nickel
price
started at a peaked the pinnacle percentage, and in
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end
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this
figure became the lowest point. Meanwhile,
copper
and
zinc
prices increased. In January, Nickle started
price
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the price
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at 6%, and the
copper
and
zinc
occupied 2% and only 1% respectively. When the time went,
Nickle
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price
dramatically fell to -3% before June,
after
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that the figure up and downs to 1% since the end of
year
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.
However
,
zinc
began at 2% and sharply peaked in February at 3%, after that the
price
with
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copper
declined
under
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the
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0%, but
this
was higher than
the
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Nickel. After June, cooper and
zinc
increased and remained stable until October. In October
zinc
and
copper
decreased
approximately
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0.5% and -1% respectively,
than
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then
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the
price
of
zinc
(2%) increased and
copper
increased to nearly
Zinc
price
at the end
of
year
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the year
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, zinc with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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