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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the
price
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 of
copper
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, nickel and
zinc
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 changed each month in 2014. As can
been
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 from the graph, the nickel
price
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 started at a peaked the pinnacle percentage, and in
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end
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this
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 figure became the lowest point. Meanwhile,
copper
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 and
zinc
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 prices increased. In January, Nickle started
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price
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 at 6%, and the
copper
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 and
zinc
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 occupied 2% and only 1% respectively. When the time went,
Nickle
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price
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 dramatically fell to -3% before June,
after
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 that the figure up and downs to 1% since the end of
year
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.
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,
zinc
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 began at 2% and sharply peaked in February at 3%, after that the
price
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with
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copper
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 declined
under
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the
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0%, but
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 was higher than
the
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Nickel. After June, cooper and
zinc
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 increased and remained stable until October. In October
zinc
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 and
copper
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 decreased
approximately
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 0.5% and -1% respectively,
than
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then
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 the
price
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 of
zinc
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(2%) increased and
copper
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 increased to nearly
Zinc
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price
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at the end
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 of
year
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, zinc with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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