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The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The two figures illustrate the passenger complaint number of a bus
company
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 and its on-time targets and the reality over a 4-
year
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 period.
Overall
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,
this
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company
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's actual on-time percentages fluctuated,
whereas
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 its targets gradually decrease
year
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 after
year
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.
Moreover
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, the number of
complaints
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 witnessed a rise when comparing the first
year
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 to the
last
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 one. In 1999, the punctuality goal of
this
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company
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 was 86%,
while
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 the result was 85%. After a
year
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, the target was the same as the first
year
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,
whereas
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 the outcome witnessed a 3% drop, which was from 85% to 82%. In the period from 2001 to 2002, the goal and the actual result of the bus
company
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 were stable at 85%, which was reduced from 86 to 85%, and 84%, which witnessed a raise of 2%, respectively. In the
last
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year
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, the actual outcome surpassed the goal which was 85% to 84%, which observed a decrease one more time.
Moreover
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, there was a fluctuation witnessed in the number of customer
complaints
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. Starting with 70
complaints
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 in the
year
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 1999, and
then
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 rising to 100 in the following
year
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.
Subsequently
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, it dropped back to 90 after a
year
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. In the next 2 years, the customer complaint numbers witnessed a steady increase and
then
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 hit its peak at 120
complaints
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 in 2003.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, moreover, whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words company, year, complaints with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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