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Describe the trend of employment in Australiain the year 1990-2000

The given line graph shows a trend of workers who were employed in the engineering, service industry and the agricultural sector in the
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 between 1990 and 2000. The worker's unit is given in millions (000,000).
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, Engineering had the highest number of workers throughout the given decade. The agricultural industry had a few ups and down after starting as a third choice in the beginning but it dropped down even
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 significantly by the end of the decade. In engineering, around 5600,000 people were employed in the
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 1990. Numbers rose steadily in the next few
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 and reached 600,000 by 1996. It reached 700,000 in the next
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 with a big jump followed by a static next
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. After 1998, it kept rising and reached its highest peak of approximately 85,00,000 in the
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 2000. The service industry started with around 4500,000 employees but over the
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 these numbers fell down to 210,000 by the end of the given period. Agricultural sectors gave employment to 400,000 workers at the start, but it dropped to 300,00 in the next two
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 and after some static
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,
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 fell down least to less than 100,000.

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