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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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Despite the fact that many efforts have been done in the section of
food
,
still
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 many people suffer from
lack
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a lack
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 of
food
 repositories in various
region
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regions
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 of the world. I opine that
althought
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although
 the solutions are not easy but they can alleviate the problem.
to begin
 with, in recent years the class gap among
masses
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the masses
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 become significant. which means that facilities are
become
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 more accessible for
well-off
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the well-off
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.
However
, destitute may have difficulties to benefit from the basic amenities of vita
such
 as potable water and sufficient nutrients.therefor, development in agriculture does not contain poor society. to exemplify,
as a result
 of famine and starvation the number of mortality in
aferican
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African
American
 countries increasing day after day only because they are unable to expend the price of
food
.
while
 people in rich states can consume everything that they crave
for
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. to curb the side-effects of the problem the onus is on governments to allocate
budget
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a budget
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 for
establishment
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the establishment
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 of an organization that they can monitor the
disturbation
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distribution
 of
food
 supply or assign
subsides
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subsidies
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 for poor countries to reduce the cost of producing
nutritients
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nutrients
 for them.
in
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 addition, people can make a donation to these charities to decrease the
suffer
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 of
this
 problem.
to sum up
, I reiterate that
lack
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the lack
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 of
food
 supply in certain countries are
serious
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 issue and must take into account by both government men and individuals until it is not too late.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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