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Some people believe that studying in a college or university is the best way for students to prepare for their future career. Others think they should leave school as soon as possible to develop their career through work experience. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Studying in college has been recognized as the best way for
students
 to prepare
their
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for their
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future
career
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careers
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.
While
 other people argue that
students
 should leave
school
 to
develope
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develop
 their
career
experience
. I partly agree that
students
 should leave
school
 for work to gain work
experience
although
 it is important for them to learn
knowledge
 at
school
.
School
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Schools
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 can offer theoretical
knowledge
 to the
students
.
For example
, a student
majored
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 in Marketing will learn
amount
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a amount
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 of basic sciences about Marketing and Financial management , which can help them to
develope
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develop
the
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apply
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management and analytics job skills.
That is
 to say, the professional
knowledge
 and skills that can be acquired at college
is
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are
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 the key
of
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to
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the
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apply
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future
career
 development. The
students
 can take the steps to plan their
future
career
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careers
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 through the courses and expertise. Working will help
students
 to gain practice
experience
. There are a large number of problems that
not
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are not
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 shown in the textbook in the real working environment.
Students
 need to
engaged
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 in different working occasions to learn communication and cooperation skills to enhance their adaptability and get more
experience
. It is crucial for
students
 to have a brighter
future
.
In addition
,studying
in
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at
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 a university to accumulate
knowledge
 is the foundation of
future
career
 development for
students
. Meanwhile, leaving
school
 for work is
also
 vital to
students
 to gain practice
experience
.
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