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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

#english #school #languages #risk
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recent years, the popularity of
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students,
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individuals should be educating
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 important
language
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English
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 students who are preferring to study abroad their knowledge and power of fluency in
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 mandatory. Another reason, in school the teaching of
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language
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 maintain their school’s publicity in
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 education system.
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, majorly all the schools have started educating
English
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, Local
languages
 are getting extinct as the foremost preference is given to foreign
languages
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languages
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 their culture and tradition.
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, the history of art and many slogans are being written in local
languages
 like Sanskrit or Hindi. In my opinion, to ensure the survival of traditional
languages
 government should take some actions to have compulsory education and
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languages
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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