The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The picture lays off several pieces of information explaining Garlsdon. A new store is planned for the town. The map shows the two most possible sites for it.
This
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essay will give more details about the photo and highlight important features of the map.
Overall
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, the first prefered zone for making a new store is in the northwest of the city
while
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the second is located in the centre of the town. Garlson has four areas that are marked by different colours on the map, the countryside in white, the town centre in beige, the housing spot in light brown, and the industrial spot in dark brown.
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, railways are drawn as dotted lines
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main roads are given in solid lines.
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, it connects to three nearby cities,
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as Hindon in the north, Bransdon in the southwest, and Cransdon in the southeast. The first site
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chosen for building the new supermarket is in the countryside, outside the industrial area marked by a dark brown colour. It is clamped between the railway and the main road that lead to Hindon.The second position for the marketplace is in the centre of the residents, which has no traffic zone and is marked by the letter S2. It is surrounded by industries and the rural area in the outer ring. It is
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near the only train track in the region and the path to Bransdon.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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