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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below. You should write at least 150 words.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The above chart displays
data
 about the smoking rate of
two
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the two
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 genders in
Someland
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Homeland
.The
data
 is about the past from 1960
untill
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until
 2000, and it is recorded per 1000 people. From the given
data
,
it is clear that
smoking
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the smoking
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ration
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ratio
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 was at
peak
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its peak
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 among
men
 in the
year
 1960, but it declined later.
Similarly
, smoker women were at the lowest rate in the
year
 1960, but
this
 value progressively increased with the passage of time. From the available
data
 in the graph, it is evident that there is a big gap between
men
 and women
in
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 the perspective of their smoking habit.
This
 gap is massive between the
year
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years
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 1960 to 1975. At the start of the
year
 1960, there were less than 100
smokers
 women but for
men
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,men
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this
 value was close to 6000 and
then
 with
passage
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 of time, the number of smoking males decreased constantly and within 15 years more than 100
men
 out of 1000 left smoking, so number of male
smokers
 reduced to 500 out of 1000.
While
on the other hand
, female
smokers
 get increased and within
period
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a period
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 of 15
years
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this
 value increased by 200 per 1000 females. On the other side, after the
year
 1975 until 2000, the number of
smokers
, both males and females started decreasing, and it ends up near
to
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300
smokers
 out of 1000 in
year
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the year
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 2000.
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