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Houses are essential for people. Some people think that the government should offer free houses for people who cannot afford to pay for it. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#houses #people #government #offer #afford
Some
people
 argue that the nation should provide free houses for poor citizens.
However
, I strongly believe that when the houses given to
people
has
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negaitive
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negative
 effect much more than a positive effect. If the government will give
to
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free
house
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houses
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 for
homeless
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the homeless
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 and
people
of
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noting
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nothing
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 to do,
that
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people
disapear
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disappear
 on the street and
then
 we have a clear
enviorment
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environment
. but normal
people
 who work really hard have a mood of despondency.
As a result
, there will
people
 not work.
That is
 why they have the easiest way to get the
house
 is not having a job and not
to
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working. And the
popullation
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population
 of
people
 not working going up.
that is
 the same meaning of
people
 who pay taxes
are
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going down. As time goes by, it will
be
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significally
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significantly
decreaed
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decreased
decreed
 the
Goverment's
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government's
 taxes.
As a result
, we will worry about the
financial
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 of the country. The government should consider
that
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improving
to
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people
's ability to earn money more than providing free houses.The country should be able to make an effort
gor
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for
 citizen's stable
job
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jobs
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,
house
environment
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environments
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, good jobs and education for
work-skills
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work skills
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. For the reasons mentioned above, I totally disagree with
this
 opinion.because giving
to
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free
house
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houses
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 is not that effective for solving these problems.
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