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the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories

the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories
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The bar chart illustrates the gross amount of call times (
minutes
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 in
billion
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) of three different categories in the United Kingdom over the period of seven years (from 1995 to 2002).
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,
time
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 spent on the group Local-fixed
line
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 is much higher than the other two groups,
while
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 Mobiels (all calls) shows the minimum
time
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 consumption throughout the whole analysed stage. Meanwhile,
time
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 spent on the National and international fixed
line
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 and
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Mobiles
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 (all calls) exhibits an upward trend during the entire
time
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 span,
whereas
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 a downward trend could be observed on the Local-fixed
line
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 from 1999 to 2002. In terms of the Local-fixed
line
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, the consumed
time
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 in 1995 was approximately 72
billion
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minutes
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 and
then
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 continued to rise to the maximum value of 90
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minutes
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 in 1999. After 1999, the number constantly reduced to about 72
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002, just as that of 1995. For National and international-fixed
line
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 and
Mobiles
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 (all calls), the amount of call
time
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 was small in 1995 (roughly 37 and 3
billion
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minutes
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 for National and international-fixed
line
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 and
Mobiles
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 (all calls) respectively) but saw an obvious increase trend during the following six years.
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, the values for National and international fixed
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line
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 and
Mobiles
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 (all calls) reached 61 and 46
billion
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minutes
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion, time, line, mobiles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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