The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
The provided bar graph illustrates information about the change in
people
who were born in
Australia
and outside
Australia
lived
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who lived
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in locations
such
as
cities
,
towns
and rural
areas
from 1995 to 2010, with data
prsented
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presented
on the percentage scale.
Overall
, the number of
people
lived in
cities
more than in rural
areas
and
towns
. In detail,
people
born outside
Australia
tended to live in
cities
in 1995 and 2010.
Also
, no more they did not like living in rural
areas
. In 1995, the number of
people
in rural
areas
living was
at
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apply
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40%.
However
, in 2010, the figure decreased to about 10%
one fourth
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one-fourth
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.
In addition
,
people
too born in
Australia
tended to live in
cities
in 1995 and 2010 . But, a lot of
people
left rural
areas
and
towns
between 1995 and 2010. The number of
people
in
towns
and rural
areas
living
were
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was
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20% to around 10%,
30
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and 30
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% to about 10% decreased respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, cities, towns, areas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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