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The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The provided bar graph illustrates information about ranking for countries of the making and spending of electricity in 2014, with data presented on the
billon
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billion
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 kWh.
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China
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 had the highest making and spending of electricity. And, South
Korea
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 was the lowest production and usage. In detail,
China
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 and the US were
significantry
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significantly
 higher than other countries in the production and consumption of electricity.
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China
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China's
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figure
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 was more than 5
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 higher than Russia, which ranked third and
top
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the top
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 10
country
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countries
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 South
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Korea
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Korea's
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figure
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more
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was more
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 than around 11
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.
Also
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, The US
figure
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 was 4
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 higher than
Russia
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Russia's
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 and 10
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 higher than South
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Korea
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Korea's
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.
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, other countries except
China
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 and the US had about equal
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figure
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figures
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 between around 500 and 1000 billion kWh.The rankings were Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and South
Korea
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. Among them, only Germany had a
figure
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 that consumption was higher than
production
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the production
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of
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by
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aobut
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about
 30 billion kWh.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, korea, figure, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • top 10 countries
  • production
  • consumption
  • overview
  • compare
  • significance
  • data
  • electricity
  • regional differences
  • factors
  • influence
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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