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the plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment

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The maps illustrate the university’s
sports
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 centre in its current form and its purposed development. Looking from the
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the building will experience some changes. It is noticeable that the area will be expanded and a lot of new facilities will be added. With regards to the present layout, there is an entrance on the south side of the plan with a reception just behind it.
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, there is a big swimming pool in front of the reception, which is surrounded by a changing room in the west, a gym in the north and a seating zone in the east.
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, there are two outdoor courts outside, which were built on the left and on the right sides of the centre.
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 the future plan, the courts will be replaced by a leisure pool and
sports
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 halls. A few changing rooms are
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 planned to be established on the west and on the east angles of the building. The changes will
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 include a café and a
sports
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 shop construction, and two dance studios will be built near a
sports
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 hall.
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, a gym will be extended,
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 a changing room and a reception will be unaltered.
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