the graph gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with the prediction for 2030 and 2040.

the graph gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with the prediction for 2030 and 2040.
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The graph depicts the ratio of the
population
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in four different countries for five decades, with
an
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anticipation for 2030 and 2040. In 1970 ,both Indonesia and Thailand have around 75
percent
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per cent
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of total city citizens.
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, they have a
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increase to below 30
rate
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2000
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and
then
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Indonesia’s percentage of
population
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overtake in 2000. The total
population
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of Indonesia will be increased dramatically to almost 60 in their predictions
in
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2040. The
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chunk
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population
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the population
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in Malaysia and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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was the same in 1970.
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,
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the Philippines
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Philippines
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Philippine's
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population
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rate has fluctuation during
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this
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50 years
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they think that it is going to lave pick in 2040 with 55%.
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,
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Malaysia’s congestion in cities has
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grown consistently and it will be around 80% after 70 years.
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, the percentage of the
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of people who live in cities is going to be the highest
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and it will be the opposite of
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Thailand’s
population
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grow
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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