the graph gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with the prediction for 2030 and 2040.
The graph depicts the ratio of the
population
in four different countries for five decades, with an
anticipation for 2030 and 2040.
In 1970 ,both Indonesia and Thailand have around 75 Correct article usage
apply
percent
of total city citizens. Change the spelling
per cent
Moreover
, they have a Slightly
increase to below 30 Change the word
Slight
rate
Change to a plural noun
rates
2000
and Change preposition
in 2000
then
the
Indonesia’s percentage of Correct article usage
apply
population
overtake in 2000. The total population
of Indonesia will be increased dramatically to almost 60 in their predictions in
2040.
The Change preposition
for
chunck
of Correct your spelling
chunk
population
in Malaysia and Add an article
the population
Philippines
was the same in 1970. Correct article usage
the Philippines
Although
, Correct article usage
the Philippines
Philippines
Change noun form
Philippine's
Philippines'
population
rate has fluctuation during this
50 years Correct determiner usage
these
but
they think that it is going to lave pick in 2040 with 55%. Remove the conjunction
apply
Furthermore
, the
Malaysia’s congestion in cities has Correct article usage
apply
been
grown consistently and it will be around 80% after 70 years.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Overall
, the percentage of the amount
of people who live in cities is going to be the highest Change the quantifier
number
percent
and it will be the opposite of Replace the word
percentage
the
Thailand’s Correct article usage
apply
population
grow
.Replace the word
growth
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