In theie advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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companies
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highly competitive and all business create strategies to attract more consumers through
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advertisement that highlight new feature products.Meanwhile,there are some disadvantages
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trend.I personally feel that advantages are far more noticeable.
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,people get used to fasting trends,new and modern.Since technology has
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a significant role in our life
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made consumers have a higher expectancy of
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innovative
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ever before.
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,companies have to follow those trends,if they want to stay
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apple company has a new series of
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coming up every year,and they assure that they advertise why is the new iPhone model better than the
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year and what new feature it has that makes people have
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to buy their new iPhone model.
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, Competition is important for the economic growth of a country because of the development and improvement of goods and services.
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,new and better goods and services mean more benefits for people.if mobile
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had not been created smartphone,we have not had communication easily with them In conclusion, In
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businesses usually highlight their new and modified products so they can keep up and beat their competition.
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,the customer is made to feel the need of having that new and trendy product so that the company can make more and more profit by introducing those changes into products.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competition
  • Consumer demand
  • Novelty
  • Innovation
  • Progress
  • Differentiation
  • Attract
  • Generate
  • Interest
  • Positive aspect
  • Negative aspect
  • Emphasize
  • Balancing
  • Quality
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