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the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories

the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories
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The bar chart gives information on the number of minutes per year of phone calls made in the United Kingdom.
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, local calls remained the highest among the three categories (between 1996 and 2002) but fluctuated during the period registering its highest in 1999. National and international is the second highest witnessing a steady increase over the period. Mobiles are the
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 place yet experiencing a steep hike after 1999. Starting off, local calls stayed at the top during the whole period seeing a moderate climb beginning from roughly 72
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 until 1999 (90
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) and
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 falling to finish at just over 70
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 in 2002. National and International calls were in second place for the whole duration experiencing a steady rise starting from around 37
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 and finishing at a little above 60
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. In third place, there are mobiles with just shy of 3
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 at the beginning. Mobiles rose marginally until 1999 (12
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) when their figures saw a marked increase and by 2002 they had reached approximately 46
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