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In many countries women are allowed to take maternity leave from their jobs during the first mothh after the birth of their baby Do advantage outweigh disadvantage ?

#countries #women #maternity #jobs #first #mothh #birth #baby #advantage
In several
nations
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 women are permitted to take maternity off from their workplace during
first
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the first
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 month
pregnancy
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of pregnancy
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 after the birth of their child. ,
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 disadvantages overshadow the advantages. Let us discuss it in subsequent
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along with
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female
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females
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 take
break
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a break
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 from
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their job
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job
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jobs
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 during
pregnancy
 Whereby,
physical
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whereas physical
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 activities
dercrease
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decrease
decreased
 and natural birth chances are less. Apart from it, if women
are takes
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 leave early it will bad impact
upon
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 their work experience. To
exemplfy
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exemplify
 one survey conducted by , world Health Organization
amid
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in
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 two nations female in
yera
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year
 2018 revealed that around 70
percent
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of
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female
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females
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 had given
given
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baby birth by surgery because they left
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their job
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job
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jobs
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 in early
pregnacy
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pregnancy
so they did
less
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fewer
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 activities .
On the other hand
, little bit
benefits
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available
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 as well because with
mattentiy
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maternity
 leave
felame
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flame
 can spend
lot
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a lot
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 of time with family
furthermore
,
pregnancy
 leave can not be ignored During
pregnancy
 they need more rest they can eat
healthy
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healthily
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 at home even, at home will not take more stress there for
pregnancy
 time
wll
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will
 best for them
To sum up
 it could be concluded that,
although
matrienty
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maturity
 leave
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necessary
nessary
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necessary
 for
female
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females
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nevertheless
, several
of
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apply
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drawback
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drawbacks
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 available there
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