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Some countries have introduced laws to limit the working hours that an employer can ask from an employee. Why are these law introduced? Is this a positive or negative trend?

In most countries, but not all, it is becoming a prevalent situation to impose some
legislations
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 related to
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reduce
 the working
hours
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 of employees in their
work
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- time. In my opinion,
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 it has both potential benefits and drawbacks,it leads to
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condition
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 of
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workers
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 life
as well as
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societiesʼs
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. There are several major reasons associated with imposing
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 about limiting working
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. One of the core reasons
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such
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laws
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to
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 promote a
helthier
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healthier
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work- life
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work-life
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 balance. Excessive working
hours
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,
for instance
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,can lead to physical and mental health issues,stress and burnout,negatively affecting employeesʼ
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well- being
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. If people have a workload,
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,they
work
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 12 to 16
hours
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 in a given day, they certainly cannot spend enough time
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 their family and own life.
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, gender equality can be one
primariy
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primary
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 reason why to introduce
such
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laws
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, because, when women
workers
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 are
in
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the
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work
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, their children and
homechoires
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home choirs
 may be in disregarding state.
These kind
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 of
laws
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 can help not only to
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equal
their
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responsibilities between
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 and male in the family but
also
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 to spend sufficient time for caregiving and
domeatic
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domestic
 tasks. To my mind,
this
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 trend follows more positive sides rather than negative ones cause of having benefits in every aspect. If some factories
more
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 people who lose their health
work
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 put
these kind
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 of
laws
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 , they would give some help
for
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 their employees in ways of health and
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well-being
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. Limiting working
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 can reduce stress
in
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the
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work
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 and
also
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 burnout and
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to
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focus
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outside of
work
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.The
doctorsʼ
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doctor
 job,
for example
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,is really too demanding,
thus
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 they are tired easily
as well as
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 might
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 some mental problems in their lifestyle.
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, limiting working
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 is
great
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 benefit for all
workers
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 in so many strict ways. In conclusion, it is true that imposing some
laws
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 related to reducing
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work-time
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work time
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 can
be
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cause to be healthier and well- being and always it is
apreciated
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appreciated
 by all
workers
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 in terms of positive consequences.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental health
  • employee rights
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • absenteeism
  • exploitation
  • social justice
  • adequate
  • leisure
  • recovery
  • stress levels
  • motivation
  • focused
  • structured
  • manageable
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