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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart informs us about the
age-group
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 of
the
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Iceland's
population
 from 1990 until 2020.
Overall
, we can see that Iceland's youth
population
 has declined in the past three decades, having increased the average age of the
population
.
However
, the rate of adults has grown significantly throughout
this
 time as well. During
1990s
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, the number of
people
 belonging to the
age-group
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 below twenty-five
has
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suffered a decrease,
while
 the percentage of adults and senior citizens (
people
 above the age
twenty-five
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)
has
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increased, with
people
 between fifty-five to sixty-five being an exception (getting lower and closer to ten
percent
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per cent
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). From 2000 to 2020, the percentage of adults (
people
 from age twenty-five to fifty-four) reached its peak, from almost thirty
percent
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 skyrocketing to fifty
percent
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per cent
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. the decline of the
population
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youth still went on to the point where the
population
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people
 below fourteen, being around thirty
percent
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per cent
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 during the 90s, has gone below twenty
percent
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per cent
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, in 2020.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, people, percent with synonyms.
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