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Many people beilve that it is better to buy house than rent it. Do you agree or disagree

Some
people
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 think that it is better to purchase a
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 than engage
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. In my opinion,
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 agree with
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 statement with some advantages reasons the private
house
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 brings. One of the important reasons is that buying
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house
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a house
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 will have more private space for family members. Because they will not be
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affected too much by the noise or the troubles of the neighbours. So,
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 will help
people
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 to have more time and space to rest and relax.
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,
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 who like gardening will freedom to grow or plant trees without damage from neighbours.
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 is not only good for health and hobby
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the
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conflicts between
people
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 in accommodation blocks. The next reason is that
people
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 don't need to worry about paying for accommodation monthly, which is the biggest anxiety for most of the
people
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 who rent a
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. Buying a
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 will save a lot of money and time that can spend on essential things.
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, they do not have to change their accommodations often. The private
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 provides permanent accommodation and rooms for family members,
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, they do not spend much time
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finding a new
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 for rent. In conclusion, buying a
house
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 has more benefits than disadvantages it brings.
People
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 will have more comfortable and free space to relax.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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