Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages.

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living close to where they were born, others are not. Some
people
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do not want to give up their security zone,
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conversely
others
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not. Today I would like to talk about these reasons,
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and disadvantages.
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were born, they lives and
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died
. The most important thing,
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you are living
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to live. Some
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are concerned about if they go
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far from their family or district. Because They are used to relax and do not give up
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comfortable. They are feeling happy for themselves
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this
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circle which is their
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,
famlies
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families
,friends etc. What are the
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of
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? These
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are
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continuos
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keep in touch
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family, friends, cities etc. They do not miss lots of things. Because
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is already
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there
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close. İf they want to meet close friends just only they call him/her and they can meet easily. They do not use
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structure "
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ı come
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we will see each other, ı miss you so much etc"
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these
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situations
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are included disadvantages
lots of
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. I would like to one example from
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my
life
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. My
dad
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is
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engineer. He studied İstanbul which is one of the best and biggest
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city
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in Turkey. After he graduated from university he returned to his
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original
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which name is Erzurum. Erzurum is
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city
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and there
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no
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not
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lot of
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advantages
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work
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. And my
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knew that, he has never given up Erzurum. He married, worked and retired in there.
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my
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's
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has been
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stable
up till now. His
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colleagues
took promotion
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work
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how to
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other
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city
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and gain other experience. but My
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did not. Even his
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assistant
engineer became general manager at the same
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corporation
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,
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, my
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's vision did not
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. because he has lived in
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city
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that is
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he has lived to close where he was born and their extended family.
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, somebody
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to look
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at
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advantages
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the advantages
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and
diadvantages
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disadvantages
after
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that he/she should decide to where live
in
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.
if
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the
city
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does not offer
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a lot
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of
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to us we should remove where we live. Because
techonology
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technology
is improving day by day. İf you want to go to
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your
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city
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you can arrive there within a maximum
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day,
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a minimum
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1
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hour.
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why, we should not miss
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the advantages
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that
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is offer to us because of distance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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