In many countries, governments like to spend more money on the arts. Some people agree with this. However, others think the government should spend more on health and education. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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the national budget in arts.
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other side, it is quite important to
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money on
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. In
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advantage
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and give reasons why I think health and education development
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more priority.
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part of our life. We share our feelings
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, painting and making crafts which
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with someone.
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, painting is joyful for everyone. If someone boring with their job life or
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painting is really connected like
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friendship.
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or roads.
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song
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music, same as dancing
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shinning our life when
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smart.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriches
  • cultural heritage
  • national identity
  • stimulate tourism
  • mental health benefits
  • therapy
  • stress relief
  • sense of community
  • prioritizing
  • strong foundation
  • socio-economic development
  • disease prevention
  • life expectancy
  • employment opportunities
  • fundamental rights
  • healthcare
  • allocation
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