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Many people hold the view that it is better to buy thier home rather than rent it. Do you agree with this statement or not ?

#people #thier #home #rent
We live in an age when many of us are
keen
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 on
owing
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owning
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 a
home
 than living on rent,
while
this
 writer
accept
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 that
this
 perception is somewhat justifiable and will give corroborating arguments. First and foremost, many citizens prefer to own a place to live in
due to
 its provision
a
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of a
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sense of stability and security.
For instance
,
owing
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owning
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 a
home
supply
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 a sense of permanence, as the homeowner has control over their living situation and can make changes to the property without needing to seek permission from a landlord. On top of that, not only those inhabitants should
be
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enjoy the independence but
also
convenience
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the convenience
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 of a comfortable lifestyle. Homeowners can personalize their living space, making it truly their own, without the limitations that renters face.
For instance
, they can have the freedom to remodel, paint or design their
home
 in any way they please. In short, the desire to own a
home
instead
 of renting one is understandable given the benefits it offers.
Therefore
, I believe that owning a
home
 is a positive development that should be encouraged.
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