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Many people hold the view that it is beter to buy their home rather than rent it.Do you agree with this statement or not?

#people #beter #home #rent
Today it is
common
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 belief that buy own
house
 or not
depend
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depends
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 on their preference about the place
for
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to
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 live. Owing a
house
much
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important
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more important
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 than
rent
 it so I totally agree with
this
 statement and I will discuss my view in
this
 essay. Living in a self-owned home
give
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 the feeling of comfort, security and it
become
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becomes
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 their asset.
Moreover
,
owing
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owning
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 a shelter is a very positive situation because
its
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it
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 become a profitable investment so that you can not worry about the landlord and do not need to pay
montly
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monthly
rent
 or
year
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rent
.
For instance
,
vietnamese
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 opine that they need to
owing
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owe
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 at least one
house
 and two vehicles because they believe that
nowsadays
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nowadays
 their child must have a good future without losing their peers. Over time, real estate tends to appreciate in value, meaning that homeowners can potentially make a profit if they sell their abodes later on.
Furthermore
, owning a home
also
 provides a sense of permanence and stability, as they can stay in the same place for as long as they desire. In
speciment
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specimens
specimen
, people who own their houses can invite their friends to come with some events.
As a result
, you can easily keep pets without the control of the renter.
In addition
, when you
rent
house
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a house
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 you need to follow the rule that
two
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the two
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 sides had agreed
before
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on before
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. In conclusion,
possess
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 a
house
 with your own hands should be an extremely worthy result
for
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of
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 your efforts.

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