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the graph show the amount of money spent on book in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

the graph show the amount of money spent on book in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
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This
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 graph depicts the value which was spent
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on book
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book
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books
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 from 1995 to 2005 in
Gremany
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Germany
,
France
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, Italy and Austria.
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, there was a steady rise
of
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in
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 the spending on
books
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 purchasing in all the different 4 countries. Looking at
France
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 and Italy, they started in 1995 with almost 55
millin
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million
dollars
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 and 50
million
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dollars
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 respectively. The ratio of
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France
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France's
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 money
spending
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 on
books
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 rose gradually to peak in 2005 with more than 70
million
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dollars
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.
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,
Italy
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Italy's
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 spending
in
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on
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books
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 had a low
decreased
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 to reach 50
million
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dollars
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 in 1999. Alternatively, it increased in 2005 to
reachabout
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reach about
 65
million
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dollars
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. Comparing Germany and Austria, the former started with a high ratio of 80
million
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dollars
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 which is higher
that
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than
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 the latter
that
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which
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 started with 30
million
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dollars
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. Both ratios peaked in 2005 with almost 95
million
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dollars
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 spent on
books
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 in German and
near
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 70
million
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dollars
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 in
France
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, books, dollars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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