The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use.
The data provided in the form of a bar chart compares in which way the pattern of visits to a community website has changed at the
begining
of use and the next Correct your spelling
beginning
year
.
Overall
, there was an upward trend in the number of people who using
the social website over the next Wrong verb form
used
yeat
, except in Auqest which Correct your spelling
year
less
individuals spent time on that.
The figure for visitors Change the quantifier
fewer
of
the Change preposition
to
mention
platform in February and March in the first Change the verb form
mentioned
year
was nearly 1000 people, while
that of
increased significantly by 10 times in the following Change preposition
apply
year
.
The least growth in the number of visits related to Sep and Oct by rise
of less than 1000 people.
Correct article usage
a rise
similarly
, the last
two month
have Fix the agreement mistake
months
a
same Correct article usage
the
behavior
and its visit experienced a moderate rise from 10000 to about 18000.
In the first month of Change the spelling
behaviour
Add an article
the year
year
the popularity of Add a comma
,year
this
site was approximately 2500, however
that of soar to 16000 in second
Change the article
the second
year
of use.
Although
summer
season saw Correct article usage
the summer
a
same growth in the subsequent Correct article usage
the
year
, communiting
with Correct your spelling
communicating
this
website reached to
the top Change preposition
apply
its
value in June and July by 22000.
Change preposition
of its
In contrast
, the user of this
site decreased from 15000 to 13000 in the second year
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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