you have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will he charged $70 which will he taken directly from your bank.explain what has happened and say what you would like them to do about it.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to you regarding the letter that I have received.

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letter was contain a piece of shocking news that I have taken $240 from my

bank

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account

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and you asked me to charge $70 to my

account

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. If you check my documents you can realize that I have taken a loan from your

bank

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to buy a car and it had divided into 12 months and I had to pay its instalment over these months and the

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day was the final instalment, so the

bank

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overdrew $240 automatically,

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apply

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furthermore

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I ask you to check my case-history

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last

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night I sent an email again, but I didn't get any answer,

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my problem hasn't been solved,

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I received your message about it frequently, but

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error was made from your end because you

withdrawn

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$240

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of $200. I would be grateful if you resolve

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difficulty which is yours and please inform me in

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I have had an

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in your

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for 6 years and

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complication hadn't occurred before. Your attention on

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topic is urgently required, Yours faithfully, Tylor Gomez

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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you have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will he charged $70 which will he taken directly from your bank.explain what has happened and say what you would like them to do about it.

Fully explain your ideas

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as well as making money, businesses also have responsibilites. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?