Many believe that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)
Majority
of Correct article usage
The majority
people
believe that living in a city
would have a better opportunity in terms of gaining benefits compared to life
in the countryside. I strongly agree with this
idea because of the various welfare facilities in the city
that can improve the quality of life
of the people
.
First of all, people
who lives
in Change the verb form
live
the
rural Correct article usage
apply
area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
were
rarely have Unnecessary verb
apply
access
to a
several Correct article usage
apply
service
; Change to a plural noun
services
therefore
, many of them have to seek for
better Change preposition
apply
opportunities
by moving to the city
to access
welfare and jobs that will help them in
financially, mentally, and physically. The Change preposition
apply
city
has a great number of convenience services
such
as,
public transportation, healthcare Remove the comma
apply
services
, job opportunities
, education or
even an accessible to Correct word choice
and
the
technology. Those Correct article usage
apply
services
assist people
to have a greater standard of living by giving them an essential need in their life
and it also
can successfully have a long-term advantage for each individual. For example
, an
Remove the article
apply
access
to education for children is the keys
factor Change the noun form
key
of
Change preposition
in
child’s
development and future success.
Correct article usage
a child’s
Additionally
, the location of the place can be an important factor that led
to the difficulty in accessing Wrong verb form
leads
to
Change preposition
apply
services
, this
includes distance, environment, and resource
Fix the agreement mistake
resources
that
is
crucial to have as the factors of living. In the Correct subject-verb agreement
are
city
, there are definitely have
a better resource because most of them are located in the centre of the country, which benefits them to receive a good resource and Unnecessary verb
apply
product
from overseas. Constantly, Fix the agreement mistake
products
with
the rural area that located far away from the Change preposition
apply
city
, which leaves them with less
resources than in the Change the quantifier
fewer
city
, where some resources are important to survive in today’s life
. For example
, in
some areas Change preposition
apply
doesn’t
have Correct subject-verb agreement
don’t
access
to the
technology that nowadays become the most Correct article usage
apply
influence
thing in human Replace the word
influential
life
in terms of one of the tools in communication device
.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
devices
access
to opportunities
and benefits can be considered as
the most crucial things in human Change preposition
apply
life
, however
, people
in the
rural areas may not have as many Correct article usage
apply
opportunities
as people
in the cities do, which encourage
them to seek Correct subject-verb agreement
encourages
for
Change preposition
apply
the
better Correct article usage
a
life
in the city
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coherence cohesion
Refine sentence structures and clarity. Some sentences can be more concise to improve readability.
task achievement
Ensure that the reasons supporting the claim are deeply explored, with specific focus on how city life directly benefits individuals.
coherence cohesion
The essay starts with a clear introduction and ends with a conclusive statement, providing a strong structure.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples, such as access to education and technology, which support your argument effectively.