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Many believe that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

#city #life #countryside
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Majority
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 of
people
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 believe that living in a
city
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 would have a better opportunity in terms of gaining benefits compared to
life
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 in the countryside. I strongly agree with
this
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 idea because of the various welfare facilities in the
city
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 that can improve the quality of
life
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 of the
people
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. First of all,
people
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 who
lives
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live
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 in
the
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rural
area
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were
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rarely have
access
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 to
a
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several
service
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services
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;
therefore
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, many of them have to seek
for
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better
opportunities
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 by moving to the
city
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 to
access
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 welfare and jobs that will help them
in
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financially, mentally, and physically. The
city
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 has a great number of convenience
services
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such
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 as
,
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 public transportation, healthcare
services
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, job
opportunities
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, education
or
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and
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 even an accessible to
the
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technology. Those
services
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 assist
people
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 to have a greater standard of living by giving them an essential need in their
life
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 and it
also
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 can successfully have a long-term advantage for each individual.
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,
an
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access
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 to education for children is the
keys
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 factor
of
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in
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child’s
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a child’s
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 development and future success.
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, the location of the place can be an important factor that
led
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leads
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 to the difficulty in accessing
to
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services
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,
this
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 includes distance, environment, and
resource
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resources
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that
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is
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are
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 crucial to have as the factors of living. In the
city
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, there are definitely
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a better resource because most of them are located in the centre of the country, which benefits them to receive a good resource and
product
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products
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 from overseas. Constantly,
with
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the rural area that located far away from the
city
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, which leaves them with
less
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fewer
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 resources than in the
city
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, where some resources are important to survive in today’s
life
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.
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,
in
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some areas
doesn’t
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don’t
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 have
access
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 to
the
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technology that nowadays become the most
influence
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 thing in human
life
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 in terms of one of the tools in communication
device
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devices
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. In conclusion,
access
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 to
opportunities
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 and benefits can be considered
as
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the most crucial things in human
life
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,
however
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,
people
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 in
the
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rural areas may not have as many
opportunities
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 as
people
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 in the cities do, which
encourage
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encourages
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 them to seek
for
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the
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a
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 better
life
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 in the
city
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.
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coherence cohesion
Refine sentence structures and clarity. Some sentences can be more concise to improve readability.
task achievement
Ensure that the reasons supporting the claim are deeply explored, with specific focus on how city life directly benefits individuals.
coherence cohesion
The essay starts with a clear introduction and ends with a conclusive statement, providing a strong structure.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples, such as access to education and technology, which support your argument effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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