Universities should allocate the same amount of money to students sports activities as they to their libraries . To what extent do you agree with this view ?

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reverse manner and strongly agree with the given statement.
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development for population health and
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all the arguments, the strongest one to prove my view is sports activity helps people
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their health.
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if University have the same place
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student can exercise between
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