The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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has many goals and it can improve

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lives

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. By

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, Improving their

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are

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important, but finding new scientific knowledge is

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important I think. There are some reasons why I think like

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. First of all,

science

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is really important to develop the way how people make their life.

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, in the past,

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scientist named Edison had tried to figure out

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way to make some light.

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studied and did many experiments to solve

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question. And

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he had succeed and the light which had made by Edison have been made

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life better. Now, even

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, we can go almost everywhere in much better safety and can see buildings, other people, or something else.

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, we can not convince that improving

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lives

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is the most important goal of

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. Finding scientific histories or facts is

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important

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improving lifestyles.

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, we have found some scientific histories

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as humans have

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developed

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various body

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and postures from

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,

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and even

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since the ancient time. And there is a scientist who had found the physical fact that when we drop different two goods that have different

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if there is no resistance in the air, these two things will reach the ground at the same time. In conclusion, it is definitely important to improve

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lives

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science

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, but it can be the most important thing. Exploring and studying new

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knowledge

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or facts is

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important

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aim of

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. And we already have scientific

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from ancient why not only improving

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lives

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but

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exploring natural

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is important.