The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#aim #science #people’s #lives

Studying

science

has many goals and it can improve

people’s

lives

. By

science

, Improving their

lives

are

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important, but finding new scientific knowledge is

also

important I think. There are some reasons why I think like

this

. First of all,

science

is really important to develop the way how people make their life.

For example

, in the past,

the

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scientist named Edison had tried to figure out

the

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way to make some light.

Everyday

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had

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studied and did many experiments to solve

this

question. And

finally

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,finally

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he had succeed and the light which had made by Edison have been made

people’s

life better. Now, even

night

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at night

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, we can go almost everywhere in much better safety and can see buildings, other people, or something else.

However

, we can not convince that improving

people’s

lives

is the most important goal of

science

. Finding scientific histories or facts is

also

important

as well as

improving lifestyles.

For example

, we have found some scientific histories

such

as humans have

been

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developed

into

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apply

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various body

shape

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shapes

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and postures from

monkey

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monkeys

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orangutan

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orangutans

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and even

gorilla

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gorillas

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since the ancient time. And there is a scientist who had found the physical fact that when we drop different two goods that have different

weight

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weights

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if there is no resistance in the air, these two things will reach the ground at the same time. In conclusion, it is definitely important to improve

people’s

lives

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science

, but it can be the most important thing. Exploring and studying new

knowledges

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knowledge

pieces of knowledge

bits of knowledge

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or facts is

also

important

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aim of

science

. And we already have scientific

evidences

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evidence

pieces of evidence

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from ancient why not only improving

people’s

lives

but

also

exploring natural

science

is important.

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Topic Vocabulary:

crucial role
enhancing
quality of human life
advancements
medicine
healthcare
scientific research
solving societal problems
improving living standards
global issues
climate change
food scarcity
technological advancements
limitations
negative consequences
ethical considerations
sustainability
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