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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph indicates how many
households
 are existed
according to
 the annual
income
 in the US
in
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each three years.
Overall
, all the figures distributed by annual
income
 show an upward trend in the given period. In detail, the number of US
households
by
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with
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the
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annual
income
at
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of
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 less than 25,000
dollars
 represented 25
millions
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million
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 in 2007 and increased to about 27
millions
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million
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 in 2015, which peaked
nearly
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at nearly
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 30
millions
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million
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 in 2011.
Regarding the
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The
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figure
 for over 100,000
dollars
 at just below 30
millions
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million
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of
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households
 merely decreased to about 27
millions
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million
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 in 2011. After
in
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2015, the number of
households
 in the same
figure
 climbed
about
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to about
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 35
millions
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, which was the largest rate of the total graph.
In the
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The
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 case of 25,000 to 49,999
dollars
 in
the
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annual
income
, represented
the
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a
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 similar trend with the
figure
 for less than 25,000
dollars
,
started
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which started
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 at over 25
millions
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million
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 and increased to approximately 30
millions
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million
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 in 2011 and merely dropped in 2015.
While
, the
figure
 for 50,000 to 74,999
dollars
 levelled out in the given period, at just above 20
millions
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. The
figure
 for 75,000 to 99,999
dollars
also
 stayed at
the
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a
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 similar rate that indicated about 15
millions
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million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, income, dollars, millions, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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