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The line graph below shows the fast food consumption in various regions around the world from 1980 to 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the fast food consumption in various regions around the world from 1980 to 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates data regarding fast
food
 consumption in different continents from 1980 to 2022. Generally speaking, in
this
 time period there has been a considerable increase in the curves of all areas, with a surge in Asia between 2000 and 2015, a more stable rise in South
America
, and a plateaued trend in North
America
 and
Europe
 from 2005. First off, in 1980 fast
food
 clients were much higher in North
America
 (40
million
), than in
Europe
 (20
million
), Asia (10
million
), and South
America
 (roughly 10
million
). Between 1980 and 1990 American users rose by 20
million
,
while
 in the other
regions
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 the curves rose in a more sluggish manner. In the following five years, it was
Europe
 that enjoyed a steeper rise in the tendency of fast
food
 usage, reaching 50
million
of
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clients.
While
 between 2000 and 2022 the trend for South
America
 faced
a
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constant and stable growth, the number of Asian users between 2000 and 2015 skyrocketed by 30
million
, reaching almost 70
million
 clients.
On the other hand
,
Euorpean
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European
 and North American graphs flattened. In 2022, North
America
 still had the highest number of
fast
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fast-food
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food
 eaters, accounting for
slighlty
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slightly
 more than 80
million
. The Eastern continent is
second,
with 70
million
of
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users.
Europe
, whose curve has flattened
from
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since
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 2010, accounts for 50
million
 eaters.
Lastly
, South
America
 had half the incidence of fast
food
 lovers when compared to North
America
.
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