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The line graph below shows the fast food consumption in various regions around the world from 1980 to 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the fast food consumption in various regions around the world from 1980 to 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates data regarding fast
food
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 consumption in different continents from 1980 to 2022. Generally speaking, in
this
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 time period there has been a considerable increase in the curves of all areas, with a surge in Asia between 2000 and 2015, a more stable rise in South
America
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, and a plateaued trend in North
America
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 and
Europe
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 from 2005. First off, in 1980 fast
food
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 clients were much higher in North
America
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 (40
million
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), than in
Europe
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 (20
million
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), Asia (10
million
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), and South
America
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 (roughly 10
million
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). Between 1980 and 1990 American users rose by 20
million
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,
while
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 in the other
regions
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 the curves rose in a more sluggish manner. In the following five years, it was
Europe
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 that enjoyed a steeper rise in the tendency of fast
food
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 usage, reaching 50
million
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of
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clients.
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 between 2000 and 2022 the trend for South
America
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 faced
a
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apply
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constant and stable growth, the number of Asian users between 2000 and 2015 skyrocketed by 30
million
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, reaching almost 70
million
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 clients.
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,
Euorpean
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European
 and North American graphs flattened. In 2022, North
America
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 still had the highest number of
fast
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fast-food
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food
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 eaters, accounting for
slighlty
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slightly
 more than 80
million
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. The Eastern continent is
second,
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with 70
million
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of
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users.
Europe
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, whose curve has flattened
from
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since
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 2010, accounts for 50
million
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 eaters.
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, South
America
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 had half the incidence of fast
food
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 lovers when compared to North
America
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, america, europe, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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