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The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the worldwide
sales
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 of 4 kinds of digital
games
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( mobile
phone
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, online, console, and handheld
games
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) by billions of
dollars
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 in 6 years.
Overall
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, the graph shows growth in( mobile
phone
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games
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-online
games
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, and handheld
games
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) and a slight fall in console
games
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. It is clear from the graph that the highest
sales
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 from 2000 to 2006 are handheld
games
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, starting at around 11
billion
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dollars
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 to reach almost 18
billion
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dollars
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.
Moreover
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,
sales
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 increased slightly in online and mobile
phone
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games
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. Online game
sales
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 started at less than 1
billion
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dollars
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 in 2001 before climbing to around 9
billion
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dollars
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 in 2006.
While
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 mobile
phone
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games
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 began in 2002 with almost 1
billion
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dollars
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 and jumped to around 3
billion
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dollars
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 in 2003 and kept growing to reach almost 7
billion
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dollars
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 in 2006.
On the other hand
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, we can see a slight decrease in console game
sales
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, starting with 6
billion
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dollars
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 in 2000 and ending with almost half of the
sales
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 in 2006.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, games, phone, dollars, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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