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Some people think that people choose their job bases on income.to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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certain individuals
people
 always selected their
occupation
 based on
salary
. I am deeply Avery with
this
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why
people
 choose an
occupation
 of
salary
.
Firstly
,
this
 day's increasing economic crisis and
people
 suffering about
food
, medicine and cloth and everything. The reason
people
 running about
money
.
For instance
, every
food
 item has gone up. They need to spend a lot of
money
 on their
food
.
Also
, they have to do other things.
That is
 the reason why they choose an
occupation
 they first think about their
salary
. That
salary
 increases and decreases their knowledge.
secondly
, Some of them think about retiring because they have to spend a lot of
money
 on themselves and some time on their children.
For instance
, getting old they have to a lot of sick and need to stay in hospital. They have to Fay Hospital bills and medicine. Because the reason is important to think about there is
salary
.
On the other hand
, I completely disagree about
people
 who don't think about their
salary
. Because they are very important
money
 lives. We have to sand for
money
 about everything.
For instance
, someone who doesn't think about
money
 can not spend
money
 on children,
food
, and everything.
That is
 why I am I disagree with
people
 who don't think about their occupations with
salary
. In conclusion, in my opinion, everyone has
this
 about what they choose their
occupation
 they must think about
salary
. in my opinion, we have to do nothing about
money
.
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