Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to a university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is sometimes believed that every
residents
have the right to study in
university
and
governments
should put in some
efforts
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to make it possible for every financial
backgrounds
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by paying all the educational fees. The former is reasonable,
however
, I disagree that
governments
have a duty to make it free for everyone. I believe that people out there want to be treated equally in the educational environment by
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ceiling
due to
their financial background and
governments
have a duty to ensure every
students
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student
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be able to access
in
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university
and acquire degrees. The reason is that not only does
university
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the university
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provide the
students
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students'
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environment to sharpen their skill and expand their knowledge in career aspects, but
also
improve their career prospect by giving
some
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them some
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internships. As
the
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result, that may bring loads of benefits to both
residents
and
governments
which allows
residents
to improve their financial status and
also
eliminates
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country
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financial crises.
However
, all the tuition fees paid by
governments
is
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impossible.
Firstly
, that may distribute to several issues in educational systems,
such
as
students
might find no motivation to try their best at
schools
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school
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to gain
the
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scholarships and
leading
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to a major source of distraction from
study
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studies
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.
Secondly
, paying all
university
fees may cause
a
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bankrupt
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for the
governments
and
then
burying their
residents
with loads of taxes.
Therefore
,
insteading
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instead
of providing
a
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free education for all
the
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students
,
governments
can set up some scholarships, which encourage the educational spirit in each
students
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and
also
prevent the
governments
from the risk of finance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • Accessibility
  • Social mobility
  • Meritocracy
  • Economic growth
  • Equality
  • Subsidize
  • Fiscal sustainability
  • Human capital
  • Incentivize
  • Underfunded
  • Tuition fees
  • Academic achievement
  • Workforce
  • Tax burden
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