The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given charts illustrate the production of
electricity
sources in four different nations,
India
,
Sweden
, Morocco and
Vietnam
in 2003 and 2008.
Overall
, the highest
electricity
sources were
from
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
and fossil
fuel
in
Vietnam
and
India
. It is
also
noticeable that in
Sweden
and
Vietnam
, the
electricity
produced from fossil
fuel
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fuels
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made up the lowest sector. It can be seen from the charts, in
India
the largest proportion was electronic energy from fossil
fuel
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fuels
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accounted
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for 82%, which
more
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than twentyfold in
Sweden
.
In contrast
, the
hydro
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hydropower
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power
sources
was
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just a significant amount in
India
, whilst
this
segment was 50% in
Sweden
. The lowest sectors were
electricity
from nuclear
power
and fossil
fuel
in both two countries respectively. From the charts,
electricity
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source from
hydro
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hydropower
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power
was a very large majority in Morocco,
while
this
source only made up under a half in
Vietnam
. But in comparison, in
Vietnam
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the largest proportion was from fossil
fuel
,
whereas
this
source just accounted for a very small figure in Morocco.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, india, sweden, vietnam, power, fuel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Energy sources
  • Coal-powered
  • Natural gas
  • Nuclear energy
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Renewable resources
  • Energy mix
  • Clean energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Trend analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Energy transition
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Energy reliance
  • Energy portfolio
  • Year-over-year comparison
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