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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart
represent
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represents
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 information about households located in the United States and
their
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the
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income
 that they get annually in three different
period
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periods
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 of
times
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time
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 2007, 2011 and 2015. Starting with 2007,the highest number is taken by households that earn 100,000 or more with almost 30 million of them.
While
 the lowest figure is in the
group
 of people with
income
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an income
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 of 75,000 to 99,999. The number of
such
 families is lower approximately
in
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apply
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two times compared to the leader
group
in
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apply
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this
 year.
However
, the difference in
this
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these
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 statistics became less noticeable in 2011, because the number of families with
profit
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a profit
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 of 100,000 and more experienced a slight fall
in
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of
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 roughly 5
millions
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million
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,
when
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while
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 the numbers of
group
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a group
the group
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 that gets 75,000 - 90,999 remained almost the same. In the same period of time groups with 25,00 - 49,99 and less than 25,000 became higher in their numbers and
noe
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not
 the statistic is dominated by them with for both of them the figure is about 30
millions
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million
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. In the
last
 year represented in the chart which is
2015
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,2015
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 the leadership went back to the
group
 of people with
income
 of 100.000 and more. There
also
 was a decrease in figures of households with
income
 of 25.000-49,999 and less than 25,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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