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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #money #poverty #aid
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Nowadays many
countries
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 have faced a
problem
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 in terms of finance
while
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 some
countries
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 are on their way up to be rich in every aspect. Some people believe that to help the poorer
countries
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 the richer
countries
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 should help them by providing financial aid.
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, Some suggest that they should give other types of help. The following paragraphs will be discussed in detail.
Although
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 It is true that the poorer
countries
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 will have more
money
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 to drive the finance in their market after they got the financial aid. Yet, it will only solve the
problem
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 for a short period of time, after they run out of
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 they will back to that crisis again if they don’t know how to manage it in the right way.
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, It seems like
this
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 type of
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-solving doesn’t work properly on a pain point, to help them remain sustainable in terms of finances might need to find a way that they can do it by themselves in the long term.
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,
provided
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 their knowledge about how to gain an income for their
countries
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 by promoting their uniqueness, it could be their culture, food, history and many more.
On the other hand
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, it can be said that giving poorer
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money
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 can boost their financial
problem
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 in the short term. Yet, it still provides an income to the
countries
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 to run the amounts of
money
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 around their
countries
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 rather than freeze the
money
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 to stick in the same stage. In conclusion, I personally believe that providing the poorer country with other types of help might benefit their financial
problem
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 in the long term rather than a short period of time with financial aid.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
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