The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given figure illustrates the generation of electricity in
hydroelectric
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a hydroelectric
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grid station.
Overall
, we observe there are two mechanisms being performed in a power station. One during daytime in which electricity is produced.
While
the other in nighttime during which
water
is pumped to
high level
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storages
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storage
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.
To begin
with, we see a large dam is built next to
river
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the river
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, the
water
from
river
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the river
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comes to
reservoir
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the reservoir
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and is stored there. In
next
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the next
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step, there is an intake door, in
morning
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the morning
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its
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it's
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open
whereas
in
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at
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night
its
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it's
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closed. The
water
flows from
intake
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the intake
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and approaches towards
generator
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the generator
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to generate electricity. Reversible turbines are seen,
however
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,however
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during
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the day
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day
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,day
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they operate generators.
Nevertheless
in the
dark
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,dark
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they help in pumping
water
to
reservoir
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a reservoir
the reservoir
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.
In addition
, the huge generators located in
power
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the power
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station are
further
connected to power lines that
goes
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till
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to
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national
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the national
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grid.
Lastly
, there is one more reservoir on
small
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a small
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level. The
water
is stored there and
in
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at
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nighttime with the help of turbines is sent to
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the
a
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narrow pipe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • turbine
  • generate electricity
  • transmit
  • low-level reservoir
  • high-level reservoir
  • dam
  • cycle of electricity production
  • energy storage
  • flowing water
  • sustainability
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