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Some people find advertisements amusing or annoying and they are not influenced by this when they shop. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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people. nowadays there is debate as to whether
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 of individuals believe the advertisement is attractive or annoying sever for reasons On the one hand, some people believe that the
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 of the time some individuals,
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 or doing sport but the
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 more positive of the society
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 about new things after that the teenagers fast we
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advertisement there
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reactive the customers because the company
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won’t customers
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advertisements
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, price and quality
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer behavior
  • Desensitization
  • Persuasive
  • Brand perception
  • Shopping habits
  • Marketing tactics
  • Selective attention
  • Online advertising
  • Traditional media
  • Cultural background
  • Ethical considerations
  • Ad saturation
  • Advertising literacy
  • Brand loyalty
  • Consumer skepticism
  • Target audience
  • Emotional appeal
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Impulse buying
  • Ad avoidance
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