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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are two main different approaches in terms of studying
in
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 universities. Suture Some people prefer to stick to
one
 main subject ,
while
 others take into consideration
also
 minor
subiects
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. There are different reasons for these decisions and in
this
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 I'm going to elaborate on both of them. On the
one
 hand, some students take additional
subjects
 to their main
one
due to
 the fact that it can expand their opportunities.
For instance
, the majority of individuals
decides
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 to take a double program diploma in places of higher education because of the uncertainty. By learning different
subjects
 students can feel free to explore themselves and decide what subject they are more keen on.
Also
, there would be more flexibility to choose the potential job for the person who has both major and minor
subjects
 in their diploma.
On the other hand
, students
choose
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 to learn only with a main program of their qualification have confidence in their decision and they are more likely to get a job directly after graduation . For these people studying can be much easier because they are concentrated on
the
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one
 subject at a time and they already know what they want to do in the future.
For example
,
student
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students
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 who decided to be a lawyer and feel confident about their decision won't
spent
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 extra years
of
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exploring
subjects
 that they might like more. Thereby,
such
 individuals have more possibility to start working with their degree and start making a profit from their education. In conclusion, there are different ways of getting an education. Studying only main
subjects
 might lead a person to a work industry immediately
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while
 adding additional
subjects
 to a program might give people an opportunity to explore themselves and find their destiny.
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