The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.
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The bar chart illustrates information about the number of male and female workers in six different countries (Australia,Switzerland,Iceland, the UK,New Zealand and the USA) in the
years
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1995 and 2005.The units are measured in percentage.
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,it can be said that the men community worked more irrespective of any of the six countries as compared to the women.Iceland has the highest number of male staff working in the
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1995 and 2005 (70% and 83% roughly).
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women in Australia and New Zealand were seen as less employed in 1995 approximately 25%. It is quite evident that both the sexes have worked more
at the end
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of the decade in relevance with the year 1995.The employers of the UK ,USA and Switzerland have seen a minimal variation of about 10% in the two distinct
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.
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, Australia and New Zealand were almost similar in terms of the trend in employment and had fewer women working in both
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.The average number of people working
were
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between 55% to 75% in adult male and between 25% to 43% were noticed in
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the adult
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female.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rates
  • economic indicators
  • comparative analysis
  • trends and patterns
  • economic factors
  • stability and change
  • sector-specific
  • job market
  • workforce participation
  • fluctuations
  • economic growth
  • unemployment
  • recession
  • boom
  • labor market dynamics
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