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Some people say that government should pay for public health care and education ,while other say that it is not the governments’ responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #health #care #education #governments’ #responsibility
Different from some
people
 say that it is not the
goverments’
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government’s
governments
 responsibility,other
people
 say that
goverment
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government
governments
 should pay for public
health
care
 and education.There is truth in both arguments.I believe that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should support some
for
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apply
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people
.
Goverment
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Government
 should pay for public
health
care
. It is an important part
in
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of
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 life for
people
 that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 serves the
people
 and public
health
care
.Citizen’s happiness
indox
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index
inbox
 will
increased
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increase
be increased
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.Many special
crowd
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crowds
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such
 as
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the olds
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olds
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old
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poors
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poor
 and
homeless
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the homeless
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 that
they
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apply
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can’t take
aprotection
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protection
a protection
 of
health
care
 and
educatation
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education
. They say how easy it is for many
people
 to live and they will lose their balance.
Goverment
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Government
 being accountable to them and
let
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letting
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 these
people’life
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people life
people live
 becomes less difficult.
This
behavior
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behaviour
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 can make
society
 fairer and get
educate
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education
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attentioment
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attention
 more consistent.
People
 should work hard to
pat
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pay
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 for their own
health
care
 and education.Try to provide yourself with a better life.
Everyone
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Everyone's
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need
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needs
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 is
diffierent
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different
 so
rely
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relying
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 on
government
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the government
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 alone is not enough.Maybe
people
 will
also
 become lazy.But
government
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government's
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take
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taking
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a
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apply
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part of help can efficacious decrease more
people
’s pressure.It
is
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apply
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can
also
 encourage
people
 to get on education level rises and work hard .
Society
 will be more stable
ande
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and
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 peaceful
as a result
.
To sum up
,with the support of the government. It is a happy thing to feel that
the
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apply
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society
 cares for the
individul
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individual
.At the same time,
people
’s life
are
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is
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 easier and
society
is get
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is getting
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brtter
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better
 and better.
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