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Some people think distance-learning programmes can never be as good as courses taken in person.

#people #programmes #courses #person
There are a significant number of people
prefer
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 to study from a distance,
while
 others are concerned that the quality of it cannot be compared to learning directly in
class
. From my perspective,
although
 both
the
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arguments have pros and cons for the scholars, attending in person will be much more advantageous than having
online
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class
. On the one hand, it is undeniable that taking online lectures can bring some benefits for individuals. To be specific, it is immensely convenient for college
attenders
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attendees
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, especially for those who have difficulties in
traveling
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 to school or university. In the other word, the main
advantages
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advantage
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 of
distance-learning
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distance learning
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 is that it could help students to study almost anywhere and anytime. To illustrate,
due to
 Covid -19 pandemic, numerous scholars have to stay at home in order to prevent being infected.
Therefore
, online meeting apps
such
 as
zoom
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 or Teams were born which help
the
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educators to transfer knowledge to the students.
This
 benefit
also
 helps
the
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apprentices from rural areas or trouble
in
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traveling
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travelling
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 to attend lectures from
school
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schools
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 and universities in metropolises.
On the other hand
, learning
face to face
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face-to-face
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 in school is considered far
more
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superior to online
class
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classes
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.
Firstly
, it is easier for students to improve their abilities in studying. The reason behind
this
 is that when having a lecture in
class
, the scholars can easily ask the teacher or their
classmate
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classmates
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 about their difficulties.
As a result
, the learning capacity of a student would be enhanced sufficiently.
Secondly
, attending university or college in person
also
 provides a better surrounding relationship for the lecture
attenders
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. Since it is likely to meet and talk to people around, which is hard for those who have a
distance-lecture
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distance lecture
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.
thus
 developing a strong relationship with classmates and educators.
This
 is immensely vital for future work since most of the company would love to have their employee
to
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incorporate with others, which help to increase the productivity of the company. In conclusion,
although
 two opinions can bring a variety of advantages, studying in person will be a better method in order to enhance
learning
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the learning
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 capacity
for
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of
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 any apprentices.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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