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The given line graph depicts the changes of population in American states such as Columbia, Yamhill and Washington within the 60 years period.

The given line graph depicts the changes
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population
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 in American states
such
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 as Columbia, Yamhill and Washington within the 60 years period.
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, there was only one basic trend: upward. In 1940 and 2000, the highest amount of people
was
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lived in Washington,
whereas
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other
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 two states had the lowest number in the graph. It is apparently seen that,
in
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 the beginning of the year Washington had 75000 people.
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, there was a gradual increase till 1970,
then
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 the change climbed sharply and reached a peak at 245
thousand
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 in 2000. As is presented in the graph, the
population
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 of Columbia and Yamhill had the lowest amount approximately twenty
thousand
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 and thirty
thousand
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 in 1940.
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, within 30 years the
population
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 of both countries
inclemented
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incremented
 gradually at a point of 35 and 45
thousand
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, followed by a significant upward and the change in
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 of
population
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 tripled from nearly 30000 to 90000
until
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by
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 the end of the year.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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