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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Bernard
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 currently reside in
Room
 209. At the moment, I'
m
 sharing the
room
 with another student called Alex. The reason I write
this
 letter to you is because
some
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problem
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problems
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 I'
m
 facing
while
 I'
m
 living in
this
room
. First of all, I don't find it comfortable to share a
room
 with a messy person. Alex doesn't keep his
stuffs
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stuff
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 tidy,
although
 I helped him to arrange his
stuffs
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 most of the time. Personally,
this
 problem affects my work because I find it difficult to find my
stuffs
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 if things are all over the place. The second problem I'
m
 facing is the
room
 is too small for 2 people to live in. I have to squeeze all of my
stuffs
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 inside my closet and it barely fits. So because of those
problems
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 I'
m
 facing, I would like to move to a new
room
. If the circumstance is possible, I would prefer to live alone so I don't have to mind my
roommate
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stuffs
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 because I'
m
 the type of person that
value
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 time really much. Thank you. Best regards, Bernard.
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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