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Many people hold the view is better to buy their homes rather than rent it. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #homes #rent
It is often argued that we should put investment into our homes rather than hire it. In
this
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in
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aim
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 of having more private space, more freedom, and saving
your
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money. The biggest advantage of having your personal
house
 is it provides you
the
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 freedom to design your
favorite
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 rooms,
also
 you can do your hobbies more naturally. Provided that you rent a
house
, you are not allowed to replace or fix some parts in that
house
,
for example
: the
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,
colours
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 of the walls.
Moreover
, you have to compensate exorbitant payments for any
your
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 careless mistakes
while
 renting that
house
, or cannot get home too late at night.
By contrast
, you customize your favourite options in your
house
, you will find it convenient to use these facilities, no one limits the time you spend on your hobbies in the evening or can annoy you during your work time. Another benefit of getting your own
house
 is you will save
your
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money in
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 long term. The reason for my view is you may not only pay for electricity or gas bills but
also
 the room fee, which you do not have to spend money on if you live in your
house
. So I suggest that when you get a well-paid job and settle down your life, you need to buy a
house
 to save a large budget for other plans in the future rather than pay for renting a
house
.
Although
 many people cannot afford to buy a
house
, I hope
this
 essay the above clear benefits will encourage you to invest in a private
house
 rather than rent it.
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