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Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their home rather than rent it. Do you agree with this statement or not ?

#people #home #rent
Traditionally, it is considered that purchasing
home
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 has more benefits than living
a
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house
 not your own and
have
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 to
paying
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 a fee monthly. In my
invidual
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individual
, I
agree
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this
 statement and the reasons will
illustrated
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 in
this
 essay. One of the main reasons why owning a home is so important to
people
 is that provides a sense of security and stability. Renting a place of residence can often
unpredictable
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, as landlords
many
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may
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 raise
rent
 prices or decide to sell the property.
In contrast
,
home owners
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homeowners
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 have more control over their living situation and are not subject to the landlords.
For instance
, consider a family who has been renting an apartment for several years. They have established comfortable life in the
neighborhood
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, with their children attending nearby
school
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schools
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 and forming
friendship
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friendships
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 within the community .
On the other hand
,
the
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rent
house
also
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is also
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 good for
studentor
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students
people
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and people
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need
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who need
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 lower living
cost
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costs
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. There is always a
trade off
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,
rent
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renting
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house
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houses
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 have higher levels of crime,
it
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and it
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 is not a suitable place for mature
people
 to live in.
Addition
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In addition
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, renting
house
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a house
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 is a better plan for
people
 especially who can not afford it. In conclusion, I prefer buying the
house
 rather than
rent
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renting
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. If you have
backdrop
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, you can buy a
house
 and pass
to
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it to
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next
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the next
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 generation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • property ladder
  • mortgage
  • rental agreement
  • down payment
  • equity
  • appreciate
  • rental market
  • monthly installments
  • credit score
  • repairs and maintenance
  • landlord
  • tenant
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