Many people hold the view that is better to buy their home rather than rent it.Do you agree or disagree

State-of-the-art,
people
have a number of choices for their accommodation, have plenty of
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of
people
think
that is
better when hire
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than buy
house
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a house
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.
For
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my opinion, each
choices
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bring different merit rely on their requirement. With buying
building
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, despite
high
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cost,
personal
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house
is private,
family
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can design anything they feel
interest
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, especially
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furniture so that their
house
will become more exciting.
Moreover
, it is a quiet place because
this
is your area
thus
it
fit
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withmature
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with mature
people
, they have places to relax like
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, living room. On the one hand, if you
bored
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with the place you live in and want
tomove
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to move
to anywhere,
they
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can sell
their
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box
with
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higher
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cost
due to
the increase
of
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estate
agency
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or make a loan deal for
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a buyer
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buyer
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who
attend
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to
rent
a
house
In contrast
,
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of circumstances think the price of
house
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the house
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is criminally expensive and the best way for them is
rent
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to rent
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it, live in the occupy temporarily
house
waste a little money per months
depend
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on the quality of
house
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the house
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.
Furthermore
, the living time in
rent
house
is
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, around 3 to 25 years rely on
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and it is fantastic with
flexibly
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discovered person, they can move to numerous cities, live there in
the
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short time and make their journey more interesting.
Last
but not least,
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a
house
can help you choose the fittest
house
for your family in some
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until you can get
enogh
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enough
money to build your
houseThus
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houses
, with buy and
loan
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house
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houses
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have
each
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both
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advantages
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. Depend on
people
's
life style
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lifestyle
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and their budget. They can make the best decision for their life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • property ladder
  • mortgage
  • rental agreement
  • down payment
  • equity
  • appreciate
  • rental market
  • monthly installments
  • credit score
  • repairs and maintenance
  • landlord
  • tenant
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